Ethan: This term we have been looking at ways to make our writing more interesting for the reader.
We have used the following criteria to guide us:
- Changing the word order of a sentence
- Using literary devices such as metaphor, simile, alliteration, onomatopoeia and personification
- Using specific verbs and adjectives
- Using show, don’t tell techniques
- Using different sentence beginnings and lengths
Here are some examples of my writing this term.
Show,Don’t Tell-Emotions
Sadness-He’s gone mum says in a soft voice, as tears run down my face. My dog ruby has run awayfor good. I can’t accept the truth I keep saying she will come back but she never did.
Anger-One day I was in my room looking for a dollar from the tooth fairy, when under my pillow I touched something. I pull it from under my pillow and it's my tooth. I threw my pillow across the room till it hit my bedroom door.
Happy-On Saturday night my daddy coming home with a big box in his arm. He put it on the table and kneeled down and looked me straight in the face and said it's for you. I ran over to the box and started ripping the paper of. When I looked inside it was a new teddy I started to jump up and down I decided stay up all night playing with it.
Music - The pond
Once upon a time there were 4 ants, there names where Riley,Josh,Laurence and Ethan. One day they were so excited when they found a sleeping cat so as the funny ants they are they went to go pick up the cat and put him into some water. As they were just in front of the pond the cat woke up and freaked out shivering with fear after seeing the water. The cat not seeing the ants, killed all four of the ants by standing on them. Now I’m here to tell their story because I saw the whole thing. I’m the frog that lives in the pond.
The Boy 
I was walking through the park after school when a big kid came up to me, ‘’What you doing in my park kid’’ ‘’Walking home from school’’ I replied. Then he grabbed my bag and yelled ‘’ This is mine now’’ I said confle ‘’ No it’s mine you need to go home’’ the big kid didn’t say another word and dropped the bag and walked away but every couple of seconds he would stop and give me this evil steer But it didn’t hurt me I know I won.
Viking Girl
She stood in front of me and shouted ‘’I want a pony’’ and I said ‘’I’ll get you one when pigs fly’’ I replied. That's when she clicked she threw on she best viking helmet. As she was stomping towards me with rolling eyes and raised eyebrows, she looks to her right then goes over and throws a lamp on the floor. She then started to throw and smash everything in sight. Dangerously smashing a glass bottle on the floor. Starting to stomp towards her room.
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